I think Jenna has an interesting story line and I think she has done an excellent job with the class assignment we got of describing a scene without a character. I like the way she starts the story with “The tressless forest.” It made me want to continue reading. I feel the paragraph has poetic elements which work quite well. I do think it needs some refinement though, especially towards the end of the paragraph. Overall I think Jenna is off to a great start and if she spends some time expanding and revising she could come up with a great story. Excellent idea so far!
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